Thursday, April 28, 2011
FR202U e-Portfolio
As a requirement for another course, I had to create an e-Portfolio demonstrating my improvements in the French language throughout the Spring 2011 semester. If you would like to view this blog, you can click here.
Tuesday, April 26, 2011
Blog Component
I chose my first blog post to revise because it was a post about which I was particularly passionate. It breaks down one instance of how rhetoric is used in the media in a foreign country. I find the use of rhetoric in other cultures fascinating, especially in comparison to that of our own. The commercial that I analyzed could be understood in many different contexts, so it was interesting to consider all of those contexts and the types of people who might view them that way.
Original blog post #1
Revised blog post #1
I chose this second post to revise because it is about an issue in society today that I find particularly irritating. Many people today, especially those of the younger generations, do not know how to hold a meaningful conversation. It demonstrates a real need for classes on rhetoric, such as LA101H!
Original blog post #2
Revised blog post #2
I chose this third final post because it really represents a part of me that I did not realize was so important until this year. A lot of us don't understand how central the little things are in our life. I firmly believe that everyone should take at least some time out of his day to do something that he enjoys. This is a belief that I plan on carrying with me throughout the rest of my college career and life.
Original blog post #3
Revised blog post #3
Original blog post #1
Revised blog post #1
I chose this second post to revise because it is about an issue in society today that I find particularly irritating. Many people today, especially those of the younger generations, do not know how to hold a meaningful conversation. It demonstrates a real need for classes on rhetoric, such as LA101H!
Original blog post #2
Revised blog post #2
I chose this third final post because it really represents a part of me that I did not realize was so important until this year. A lot of us don't understand how central the little things are in our life. I firmly believe that everyone should take at least some time out of his day to do something that he enjoys. This is a belief that I plan on carrying with me throughout the rest of my college career and life.
Original blog post #3
Revised blog post #3
Speech Component
I chose to revise my Motivational Speech for the same reasons that I chose to revise my Persuasive Essay-- it was a topic about which I am passionate, I had the opportunity to inspire others to take action on an issue, and it was a great culmination of all that I have learned this semester.
When recording this speech, I had a difficult time because I have been dealing with a bad case of allergies lately. My voice is kind of hoarse, but there really was no avoiding that. When I recorded my speech, I made sure to vary my tone a lot more. This semester, I learned that when I speak in front of an audience, I tend to speak somewhat monotonously. In this speech, I put (or attempted to put, due to my current health conditions) as much emotion into my speech as possible. I also spoke slower and more clearly (or, again, attempted to.)
To listen to my speech, click here.
If you would like to view the original outline of my speech, you can click here.
When recording this speech, I had a difficult time because I have been dealing with a bad case of allergies lately. My voice is kind of hoarse, but there really was no avoiding that. When I recorded my speech, I made sure to vary my tone a lot more. This semester, I learned that when I speak in front of an audience, I tend to speak somewhat monotonously. In this speech, I put (or attempted to put, due to my current health conditions) as much emotion into my speech as possible. I also spoke slower and more clearly (or, again, attempted to.)
To listen to my speech, click here.
If you would like to view the original outline of my speech, you can click here.
Essay Component
For this blog, I chose my final essay to revise and post. Being a persuasive essay, it gave me the opportunity to pick a topic about which I am very passionate, educate others on this topic, and attempt to convince them to take action. I feel like this paper was a great culmination of all that I have learned in LA101H this semester. It was the ultimate test of rhetoric-- persuading someone to see something in the same way I see it.
In regards to revisions on this paper, I basically added more details to some of my weaker arguments. There were many places in which I would introduce an idea, then just leave it without explaining any more. I expanded on those areas a bit, and strengthened my thesis, as well. In my introduction, I ended with a quote from an interview about my topic, but never really stated what the problem was or what I wanted readers to get from my piece. I added a simple thesis statement telling my audience about the gravity of the problem about which I was writing, and what needed to happen in regards to such a problem.
Click here to view an unrevised copy of my Persuasive Essay.
Click here to view a revised copy of my Persuasive Essay.
In regards to revisions on this paper, I basically added more details to some of my weaker arguments. There were many places in which I would introduce an idea, then just leave it without explaining any more. I expanded on those areas a bit, and strengthened my thesis, as well. In my introduction, I ended with a quote from an interview about my topic, but never really stated what the problem was or what I wanted readers to get from my piece. I added a simple thesis statement telling my audience about the gravity of the problem about which I was writing, and what needed to happen in regards to such a problem.
Click here to view an unrevised copy of my Persuasive Essay.
Click here to view a revised copy of my Persuasive Essay.
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